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Silence, oh killer of dreams, how you break me apart and leave me alone

Silence, great demon of dark, how you remind me of all the things I've messed up and done wrong

Silence, bringer of evil, how you shake my world and bring me to tears

Silence, murder of happiness, how you won't leave me alone

Why must you torture me with your ill fitting grin, tearing at my heart and reminding me of everything that I've done? Silence, great killer, why do you bring us to our knees, make us cry and leave us be? Where is the happiness, why can't you leave me content?! What have I done to deserve such an act of unkindness?
It's in the silence where the thoughts grow, the fears take hold and the dreams shatter. The worry comes and darkens the day and beats you to a pulp. It's in the silence where you think about the things that hurt you the most, and yet you also dream of the best. The silence that can build you up and yet tear you apart. That silence constantly gripping your heart, pulling and showing such emotions you'd never show. That silence that constantly grows.

Sometimes it's nice, but most of the time for me, it leaves me in a state of thinking that doesn't always come out quite right. Dwelling on things that I cannot change, stupid words I've spoken and will never forget. It's hard to think that something will last forever in one's mind like this, but sometimes time doesn't erase memories fast enough....

Sorry, I felt poetic tonight. Enjoy.

Peace~
~Solar
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Dreamscape195 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
I... actually like the description better than the deviation itself ^^; Is that bad?
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013   Traditional Artist
Well the description should probably be part of the deviation honestly :giggle:
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Rawk-Lord-1 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011
Oh, ye of little faith. Silence is utter /bliss/. You need to learn to work it to your advantage. There is nothing better than the truest tranquility of a silent night. Hell, you can even have silence with warm company. Comfortable silences, you see, can bring a world of chatter into your heart. It can speak in ways your mouth cannot, in ways more honest than your tongue can manage. Purple prose is the response to your moment of "poetry".

Some people look at silence the wrong way. Alas.

I'm also thinking about deactivating my DA account because it's entirely useless to me. This is probably the last thing you'll see from me on here, miss SolarNounLunixFireAfewMoreNounsRose. Au revoir, enjoy some foie gras, and don't forget to tip your waitresses~
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AndreasRullmann-St Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011
Let me add: No matter of the risk of inner difficulties, I also like the silence, it's one of the reasons, I'm active at night so often.
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AndreasRullmann-St Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011
Hey, you won't be surprised, but I'm quite sure, I know the feeling, that inspired you to this poem just from my own experience with it. As a none native speaker it would be a bit audacious for me to make detailed estimations of the poetic quality itself, but for me it transports the mood quite well, the more I mean to recognize my own one in it.

However, your own comment is quite important, cause there're two sides, for sure.The silence forces us to stay with ourselves, to make thoughts, which can lead us back to painful experiences, the more for ones like us, who never seem to forget any little mistake or inadequate word, but on the other hand the combination of thinking things over in silence with the over average memory offers us a great chance, to learn and to improve our steps. I've learnt to accept this inner pain as part of my personality, as chance and as challenge at the same time. And it correlates with a high level of energy, seldom abilities, a rational mind - so you must always consider both sides.

By the way, I dream almost not at all (in my memory, of course), instead I wake up each night and think and write ...

We have to take our fate as it is, my dear, but don't forget to see the positive aspects, too, just try to use your strong rational mind to focus on them. That's the only chance to stand the dark side, I guess.
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Metal-loving-Rebel Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I wish I would have words for how great this text is but I don't.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012   Traditional Artist
<3 thanks
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InuHalfDemon Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa! Very deep. Lovely though. You write excellent poetry. :)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012   Traditional Artist
Thanks so much <3
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012   Traditional Artist
Thank you very much <3
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