Please pay no attention to the star-rating, the critique is what matters. The stars are only rated to allow submission.
First of all, I think the slant and the shape of the frame makes it look interesting, as opposed to the regular square frame.
However, the lines could use some work to make them neater. At the moment they look a bit sketchy and choppy, so my only suggestion would be to go over them again so they are smooth. Especially since this isn't a coloured piece, all the attention goes to the line-art which should be perfect then.
Grrr, no I've closed the wrong folder and lost this comment - next attempt ...
As you've already written a journal entry in matters of saving data, which I've commented yesterday, here I just wanna leave some lines to the drawing and your efforts.
In comparism to your linked first attempt with pencil, the lines are clearer here. The girl gives me the impression of a silent and thoughtful sadness with small mouth, thin lips, the eyes turned downward. It's fascinating, how some fitting lines at the right place of a face can transport an emotional state. So if this impression was your purpose, it works transcontinentally, so to say, and you should see it as success. And believe me, you draw better than you perhaps think. If I'd try to draw a human face, I must be glad about someone recognizing it as human being at all ...
Yes, as some others commented, speed will come with practice. In German there's the proverb "Aller Anfang ist schwer" (approximately "Every beginning is difficult.") and so you need to invest a lot of work into using a new technique to reach first satisfying success. If you say, it took you hours, that's already good, I think. When I had to draw or paint, some of the little number of pictures took me weeks, sometimes I made umpteen tries, until one was good enough. You remember the four little landscape paintings I sent you via Skype? I worked about two months on it, threw away half a forest of papers. It's not a shame, to work hard for success - only who doesn't give up, improves his chances to it.
As here's the newer series of comments, let me comment also your first pencil attempt from August. It was good, to explain, that one has to read from left to right, I have almost no clue of mangas and didn't eben know that. It's the same with the annotation about thoughts in circles.
And I like your handwriting, it's more personal, looks more like manual art than printed letters, and it's simple to read, absolutely no problem. It's the first time, I saw it, I think. You know mine from snail mail : )
Just don't give up, you abilities and with that your speed will improve for sure. Another poverb, this time Latin from late stoic philosopher Seneca (which I wrote in school time a work about, which compared some letters of him with the Pauline epistles): "Non est ad astra mollis e terris via.", what means in a metaphorical sense, that there's no comfortable way from earth to the stars. There also exists a short form "Per aspera ad astra!", what means "Through bitter ways to the stars!". So don't be too worried, your way is okay to reach higher aims.
Hey, and you see, to how many ideas you can inspire - that's also good, though I, just like you, as I know, tend to endless seriesses of thoughts. : )
Yeah, I'll do my best, I just.. this took so long because I'm trying to get the style just right and I'm just not used to the tablet yet because I haven't done it enough... I'm still working on it though :3
everyone! Welcome to
the Anime &
Manga half of this
me are going to
of the Anime &
this Gallery has 2
Gallery Overview is
split in 2
articles.In my ar...
These are the
from the groups
: for the months of
July and August!
Check them out &
give them love!
:+fav: this journal
so that it can reach
thus giving more
Endorell-Taelos is very well known within the community for her selfless giving and gracious community spirit. Since joining DeviantART over seven years ago, Alicia has continued to make a positive impact on many deviants. Her helpful and thoughtful approach was one of her finest attributes when serving as a Community Volunteer, and this has continued throughout the many contests which Alicia provides on a regular basis. As we approach our Birthday celebrations, we can't... Read More