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HELP - Final by SolarLunix HELP - Final by SolarLunix
Well, I fixed the hand a bit, and added some more background to it.

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Thinking about inking then coloring digitally.
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Wow, major improvement from the last one! Much more detailed and well done.

What I really like is the emotion that's coming out of this. Fear, pain, and sadness... They've all mingled together and make it quite strong!

There are a few problems with anatomy, but they're really quite minor. For one, and I know you worked really hard on fixing that hand, it still feels a bit awkward. It almost looks like she's clinging to some invisible bar in front of her. I give you major kudos for attempting some perspective work here, but the angle of the arm is what's throwing the perspective. It looks like her arm is is angled into the chest, which is the opposite of where it should be. Imagine, or even take or find some pictures of, people climbing or clinging to something. Where do the elbows point? It's usually out so that they can get better leverage. So if you just flipped the arm, not the hand, to the other side, not only will the pose be more powerful, it will look a bit more anatomically correct. (:

The hand, while looking much much better, feels a bit stiff. What I usually do, since I hate drawing hands, too, is take a bunch of pictures of yourself reaching out, to help with the perspective and natural pose. As a general rule, when you're reaching out to the camera/audience/whatever, the hand will start tilting toward the camera as well, becoming more straight with the arm and seeing less of the palm. As it is now, it almost looks like her hand is plastered against a wall, which looks stiff and uncomfortable. When you're reaching out, you try and reach as faaaar as possible, which would just change the perspective a tiny bit here. I have to say, though, the hand looks so much better than the first image. The curved fingers and the perspective of the fingernails looks awesome!

And I have to say, I'm really impressed by the background. The texture on the trees looks amazing! And I love how you can still see the roots on the tree in front. And the perspective with those trees really looks nice. If you'd like to adda bit more, consider adding grass or weeds around the roots. It just adds that next level of detail. ;D

Regardless, this is a major improvement from the first one. Really, awesome work!!
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011   General Artist
This must have taken forever! The expression and perspective distortions are perfect, and the trees are more realistic than I could do. I would avoid definite outlines around the shrubbery, though.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011   Traditional Artist
yeah a few hours actually, but I hardly noticed it, it totally got my mind off the immense pain I was in.

Yeah, the lines around the flowers coming down the cliff were a bit distracting, but that's just a note for next time.
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011
wow this makes me sad for the little kid this one really moved me great job :-)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011   Traditional Artist
I'm really happy that it actually moved you. It makes me feel like I really accomplished something with it rather than just made some random pic i made because I jumped on my bitch cycle.....

I mean yeah, that's what I meant to do! :D
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011
lol well maybe you should jump on your bitch cycle more cuz it really do make me feel for this person like this happen for real and thats what i like to see in draw. thats something that i wish i can do in my own drawing, so again great job :-)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011   Traditional Artist
Maybe, I just hope that the bitch cycle isn't as dramatic.... the last one was really realy really painful. But I like trying to bring real emotions to my characters, I hope to do more like this one.... especially the background and stuff, it was hard but it was worth it!!
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011
i hope to see more like this too i always had a problem with making tears it just looks like lines when i draw them.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011   Traditional Artist
i kinda thought mine looked like lines.... =.=
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011
no to me it shows more fear in her eyes it looked right in your drawing
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011   Traditional Artist
I'm glad. :3
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Midnight-on-Mars Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice job, the forest is drawn really well! One thing I would suggest is making the pupils of the child smaller, to make the expression more full of fear. I really like the shading in this, Very cool! :clap:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011   Traditional Artist
I'll try that when I go home.... I gotta get the drawing again.... >.<
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Midnight-on-Mars Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Okay, cool! But don't feel like you have to, it's just a minor suggestion.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011   Traditional Artist
I think I may just leave it...
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glitzychi Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh noes D:
But great job!
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
IKR? - I was kinda in pain this morning.... so I made someone else suffer to.... go pain for giving me inspiration >.<

Thanks.
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glitzychi Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. I know what you mean >_<
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011   Traditional Artist
damn bitch cycle. lol, poor kid though....
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IvanaSamandova20 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
OOhh awesomeness! :D :happybounce: Much better then the first one! :D ^^
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
yeah, only about an hour more work... and honestly, it was just a lot of erasing some new lines and a lot of fixing.
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Metal-loving-Rebel Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That's so AMAZING, even if it is a bit scaring...
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks, I really worked hard on it... like three ish hours...
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Metal-loving-Rebel Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Hardrockangel Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The hand already looks better, well done! c:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks, it took me like six tries. XD I still think its a little weird, but I'm happy with it. :3
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irishhillbilly69 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011
this a very nice drawing i love it !!!
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks, it took me a while to do it... I started at like 10 am and finished at like 12:30
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Peeka13 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Looking good~! I love how you can do backgrounds, I can never figure out how to make them look just right. XD;;
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks, it's my first real good background.... >.< at least in my opinion. I mean... the trees actually look good... for once.
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Peeka13 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Indeed they do~! o3o I could never figure out how to draw a decent tree...I mean, the trunk is pretty easy but the roots and branches...bleh. XD;;
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
why do you think there are no low branches aside from the mini christmas tree. XD
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Peeka13 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lol yeah, I tend to not draw branches either if I can help it. XD;;
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
they just end up looking odd the way they connect mirit?
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Peeka13 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, srsly. XD;; Although I bet looking at reference pictures would help...
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
or the trees right across the street.... >.<
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Nuclear-space-bulb Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really like this you did a great job :highfive:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
thanks :huggle:
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ThunderElf Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great work! :] Very interesting and awesome! I love it! <3
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks, I worked really hard all morning on this :huggle:
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ThunderElf Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No prob! :hug: Yeah, I beliebe it! ;)
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MotoNeko Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011
i would ó.ò
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
so would I...
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MotoNeko Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011
yea
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toxyn16 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Greatly Detailed, Has well positioned elements of a foreground, middle and background, Emotion in the child in need for help, The hand reaching out, makes me want to reach out and pull the child up too. I think its one of your better pieces, As this came out great.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks.
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Silinde-Ar-Feiniel Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Digital Artist
Nice work! Much better than the first one, It's good that you try and work more on a piece. It can make a huge difference. :nod:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
Thanks! I've been working on it all day, it took me all morning. I started at like ten, and just finished adjusting, I'm going to leave it like this now... I'm happy with it for my first real go at a hand thing. so ^_^ Thanks.
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Silinde-Ar-Feiniel Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Digital Artist
You're welcome! :D
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Traditional Artist
:huggle:
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