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Careful thoughts and many words
    my pen and I do weave,
from the shadows, from the depths,
    the darkness told to me.
Darkness growing ever closer,
    as the time goes by...
I stay awake to keep away
    the darkened dreams that rise.
Dreams are the gateway to a world unknown.

Peace~
~Solar
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Dreamscape195 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
This is spectacular. "Dreams are the gateway to a world unknown," even that is fabulous :D

Kind of makes me want to go read some Stephen King.... or just go to bed :XD:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013   Traditional Artist
lol the first one sounds more fun. I love Stephen King... but only when I have time to finish the whole book.
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Dreamscape195 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
Indeed ;p My favorites are Lisey's Story, Insomnia, and the Dark Towers series I think.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   Traditional Artist
I don't really have any favorites.... although I did like the dark half or something like that... I don't remember exactly what it was called.
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Dreamscape195 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
Hmmm, doesn't sound familiar, but I'll probably end up looking it up :D

I think the reason I like the ones I listed so much is that I feel a sort of kinship with the author when I read them. I really get the feeling he has the same sort of vivid dreams that I get sometimes; they all have that feeling of being based on dreams.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013   Traditional Artist
I honestly could've gotten it mixed up...

A lot of inspiration comes from dreams from what I understand... and only the most creative people have dreams that are based on something other than themselves or what they know.
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melancholymourning Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the ending a lot. Some of it seemed a little repetitive and I wish it was a bit longer to fit in more substance. I could tell your emotions though and that's the real meaning behind writing, in my opinion. Good job. c:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013   Traditional Artist
It was a little repetitive, but honestly it felt like it was supposed to be. I wanted to keep going with it, but I'm not quite sure how to continue.

:blackrose: Thanks :heart:
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melancholymourning Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I'd love to read it again, if you do. c:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Traditional Artist
mkay, I'll think about it.
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LupusAcerbus Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012
I really like the rhythm - its flow reflects the idea of the weaving words and the passage of time. Very nicely done.
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alittlebitoffaith Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
This is good
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Moombeam36 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Reads almost like a dance between the pen and the writer. Lovely
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Hardrockangel Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the first line, but I feel like afterwards the poem goes a bit into cliché-territory (if you don't mind me saying so). ^^;

For instance: the rest of the piece focuses on darkness, but the second line isn't really clear.
The construction doesn't make a lot of sense, almost?
Though I'm a novice when it comes to literature, so besides saying what I think sounds off, I can't really provide help as to what can be fixed. D:
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012   Traditional Artist
The first is supposed to lead into the second, I just didn't fix the punctuation yet... and really it's a poem commenting on where all my stories come from... the dark dreams, which is kinda why I don't sleep much anymore... those stories are getting freakier...
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Hardrockangel Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah, I see.
The trouble is that (maybe it's just me) the thought behind the poem wasn't entirely clear. ^^;
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012   Traditional Artist
probably not, kinda wasn't meant to be, but yeah, i really have to fix that punctuation... >.>
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Hardrockangel Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I wish I could help more, but you'll have to ask a proper writer for that I'm afraid. ^^;
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012   Traditional Artist
It's all good, I really don't mind staying an amateur writer.... my spelling and grammar will never be good enough with the slight dyslexia that I am dealing with.
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SilentlyInsane09 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist
lol i love my dreams
its like watching action horrors everynight XD

saves me the trouble of renting movies (nah movies are still cool)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
I love my dreams as well, however they're starting to become more and more of a dark fantasy adventure

yeah, movies are still cool, but I'm broke, so dreams have to do.
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SilentlyInsane09 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist
a well dark fantasy can be fun, in one of my dreams my brother went all crazy and started biting wolves in the neck

(i was sitting in a dead tree throwing them with marbles)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
That's pretty cool. Actually half the stories that I write originate as dreams. I actually dream that I am characters, which makes me feel like I should probably do some first person writing again.
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SilentlyInsane09 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist
cool

i wish my OC's would appear more often in my dreams, they have been here and there, usually when i realize i am dreaming i try to conjure them into the dream lol, but then they may appear dis formed XD

My concentration isn't always that good when i am asleep.

Once one of my characters came in to save my life from some bad guys, but he ended up getting beaten up with a baseball bat, which i found funny for some reason..


i have tried that but resontly i have had trouble recalling my dreams =(


we should try writing a story together!
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
Mine come in and out sometimes, and yeah writting together would be great. Do you have a google account? I found out that google docs really works great!
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SilentlyInsane09 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist
gmail?
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
google
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LawrenceCreation Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
really enjoyed it! thank you for sharing it :)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
No problem, I hope you enjoyed it as much as I enjoyed writing it!
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012
really good i wish it was longer
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012   Traditional Artist
Haha, maybe I'll work on it more when I get the chance. I just haven't had time to really develop it more... I liked the power it had in this little portion. I'm glad you liked it though!
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
i like it short too it just sounded like you have more to say. but this was deep from just alone again great job and welcome :-)
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012   Traditional Artist
There is more to say, just no good way to work it in you know?
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:icontallis1990:
Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012
yeah i get that feeling too
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
It'll probably come out in a different poem, I'm known to connect one to another, but it will have a different rhythm more than likely.
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Tallis1990 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
i be looking forward to reading it
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012   Traditional Artist
Just keep your eye out! ^_^
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withmygoldenpen Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I really love how intense this piece is. It has a lot of power in a small amount of words.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012   Traditional Artist
Thanks, actually, I think this is one of my best writings. I'm glad that you like it :3
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toxyn16 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
A great short poem. Love reading these works.
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012   Traditional Artist
Thanks
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AndreasRullmann-St Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
P. S.: Maybe, I learnt to think more in avoidance of dreaming and sleeping, just to prevent the darkness of dreams, you described ...

After all it's a moving poem.
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AndreasRullmann-St Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I feel moved by these lines ... You know, writing is also my way of getting thoughts into order, though only in parts with pen, but also a lot at PC. So especially first sentence could be mine, as I write and write and write ... and also have kinda loyal relationship to the pens, I always carry with me.

However, I don't dream much at all, almost everything are thoughts, thoughts, thoughts, taken to consciousness whenever possible, what's also a strategy to handle inner darkness, cause it's part of personality, so just to live with and not to run away. But in result it keeps awake just the same.

It's really poetic ...
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012   Traditional Artist
I'm glad that you liked my poetic poem.

I usually write in pen first, then I turn over to typing it up, but of course, direct responses are different. I love my pen, and I love my pencil.

I can't not dream. My mind loves to put a spin on reality. I'm very imaginative, as you've probably noticed. Sometimes it can be really strange, other times it can be almost normal. I quite enjoy my dreams, they usually turn into really good stories, or interesting poems...

Of course I am sure that you understand Darkness not to be the literal absence of light, but more of a darkened feeling.
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AndreasRullmann-St Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
Yeah, and I still like it - it was amazing, how you just posted it at a day, when it fitted even more to my mood.

Ususally I write directly, where I write, without earlier versions. Yes, and I knew, you write a lot, also with different colors, just as I do, cause we once wrote about this. And I'm not surprised, you love your personal writing instruments ... after all I do so, a loss brings my system of using them in disorder, and I really dislike this. Frankly, I'd have been surprised, if we had differed in this point ... lol.

Imaginative I'm too, but I guess, usually consciously, nevertheless producing many strange ideas, or at least surprising for poeple around me, who, of course, get used to this. At night, I don't dream much, I'd say, moreover thoughts can start, while sleeping, continue over waking up and often wake me up themselves. The procedure seems quite similar to what you described.

And yes, who undretands darkness in such a poem as absence of physical light, cannot be so clever ... Of course, I mean and understand the dark part of inner personality, not evil, but sad in my case.

Good, I can response at least a bit on DA, cause though Skype has been signing you as online since around 4:30 AM your time, I don't dare to use it, cause I don't wanna wake you up, the more not during break, without class. Sorry for letting you wait with more responses, but work's really hard these weeks. Nevertheless, I'm with you in mind, as you know.
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CelineDGD Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
Woaaaaaaaaaaaah! :love: amazing!
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012   Traditional Artist
thanks :3 I'm glad you :love: it
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CelineDGD Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
:love: of course!
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SolarLunix Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012   Traditional Artist
hehe :huggle: there might be more to come, I've been on a bit of a poetic streak lately, keep your eye out!
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CelineDGD Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012
Of course! :O
I write too, though now I don't post my writings. ^^;
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