Careful thoughts and many words my pen and I do weave, from the shadows, from the depths, the darkness told to me. Darkness growing ever closer, as the time goes by... I stay awake to keep away the darkened dreams that rise.
Hmmm, doesn't sound familiar, but I'll probably end up looking it up
I think the reason I like the ones I listed so much is that I feel a sort of kinship with the author when I read them. I really get the feeling he has the same sort of vivid dreams that I get sometimes; they all have that feeling of being based on dreams.
I like the ending a lot. Some of it seemed a little repetitive and I wish it was a bit longer to fit in more substance. I could tell your emotions though and that's the real meaning behind writing, in my opinion. Good job. c:
I love the first line, but I feel like afterwards the poem goes a bit into cliché-territory (if you don't mind me saying so).
For instance: the rest of the piece focuses on darkness, but the second line isn't really clear. The construction doesn't make a lot of sense, almost? Though I'm a novice when it comes to literature, so besides saying what I think sounds off, I can't really provide help as to what can be fixed. D:
The first is supposed to lead into the second, I just didn't fix the punctuation yet... and really it's a poem commenting on where all my stories come from... the dark dreams, which is kinda why I don't sleep much anymore... those stories are getting freakier...
i wish my OC's would appear more often in my dreams, they have been here and there, usually when i realize i am dreaming i try to conjure them into the dream lol, but then they may appear dis formed XD
My concentration isn't always that good when i am asleep.
Once one of my characters came in to save my life from some bad guys, but he ended up getting beaten up with a baseball bat, which i found funny for some reason..
i have tried that but resontly i have had trouble recalling my dreams
I feel moved by these lines ... You know, writing is also my way of getting thoughts into order, though only in parts with pen, but also a lot at PC. So especially first sentence could be mine, as I write and write and write ... and also have kinda loyal relationship to the pens, I always carry with me.
However, I don't dream much at all, almost everything are thoughts, thoughts, thoughts, taken to consciousness whenever possible, what's also a strategy to handle inner darkness, cause it's part of personality, so just to live with and not to run away. But in result it keeps awake just the same.
I usually write in pen first, then I turn over to typing it up, but of course, direct responses are different. I love my pen, and I love my pencil.
I can't not dream. My mind loves to put a spin on reality. I'm very imaginative, as you've probably noticed. Sometimes it can be really strange, other times it can be almost normal. I quite enjoy my dreams, they usually turn into really good stories, or interesting poems...
Of course I am sure that you understand Darkness not to be the literal absence of light, but more of a darkened feeling.
Yeah, and I still like it - it was amazing, how you just posted it at a day, when it fitted even more to my mood.
Ususally I write directly, where I write, without earlier versions. Yes, and I knew, you write a lot, also with different colors, just as I do, cause we once wrote about this. And I'm not surprised, you love your personal writing instruments ... after all I do so, a loss brings my system of using them in disorder, and I really dislike this. Frankly, I'd have been surprised, if we had differed in this point ... lol.
Imaginative I'm too, but I guess, usually consciously, nevertheless producing many strange ideas, or at least surprising for poeple around me, who, of course, get used to this. At night, I don't dream much, I'd say, moreover thoughts can start, while sleeping, continue over waking up and often wake me up themselves. The procedure seems quite similar to what you described.
And yes, who undretands darkness in such a poem as absence of physical light, cannot be so clever ... Of course, I mean and understand the dark part of inner personality, not evil, but sad in my case.
Good, I can response at least a bit on DA, cause though Skype has been signing you as online since around 4:30 AM your time, I don't dare to use it, cause I don't wanna wake you up, the more not during break, without class. Sorry for letting you wait with more responses, but work's really hard these weeks. Nevertheless, I'm with you in mind, as you know.